Pitch- feedback

After presenting my pitch, I got feedback from my audience:

It suggested improvements I could make for my final task. 
Someone suggested we should create a clearer understanding of our own narrative. Although we purposely wanted the narrative to be unclear to create mystery, we had not fully decided how much of the narrative we wanted to show in our thriller extract. Since this feedback my group have discussed the narrative and that will be in clear in my next post showing our final idea. The whole story-line wont be clear in our opening sequence: we will use a premonition to move to the future to show the difference in time. However, the premonition will contain lots of close-up's to prevent a order of events forming and allowing a focus on the editing similarly to a title sequence like 'Se7en'.
Another improvement suggested by someone in our audience was to consider what sound we want to include in our extract. In my 'initial thoughts on task' post I stated that sound would be a feature I would find most difficult. Me and my peer will discuss the use of sound to ensure this doesn't result in the downfall of our thriller extract.